Aru Asa Okitara

Please, Sir, I Want Some More.. This was a good story even for one chapter. I do honestly wish the story was more than 1. I feel that the story could've been told in 12-24 chapters. I like how the character reacts and everything. What i don't like is that the character is in a coma and some other stuff. I feel the story could've gone with the boy being in the chicks body and the chick being in the boy's body. The way the story is portrayed by the author makes me think that it could've been really good like that. Having the two of theminteract and than maybe falling for each other later. Maybe even have a thing where they switch back between each other. I just really wish this had more. I feel it could've been better if it did.

It's just a one-shot so you won't lose anything either way by reading it. It's a good concept and the art is decent, but it's just too short--though the ideas alone may be worth your time. For one, it's unclear why the character at the beginning doesn't know who they are at the start of the story. And two, there's no real buildup to justify the reveals at the end so it all just kind of falls flat. If the first section were a bit longer, it would justify the first reveal. Though if the story were longer, the ending would probably need some tweaking to hit the way itseems intended to. Honestly, it's a shame there's not a longer version.